09-12-2011, 01:33 PM
i'm definitely with leanne on this one. i am the worlds biggest get it wrongerer, but i'm okay if i get it wrong. often what we write is multi levelled and we don't notice it. i think as long as it "works' is what really matters.
enjambment; it can be a bugger to get a handle on and i agree that sometimes it can seem arbitrary. the idea is to work it so it presents what you want to say, in the best possible way.
some good images AA though i wonder if a comma is needed after great, on the 1st line. while it reads well as prose, i think it would read better in the form or a poem, though i do think if done that way a lot of the smaller words could be foresaken.
it has a godly feeling about it. i enjoyed the rainbow image. (jmo)
thanks for the read.
enjambment; it can be a bugger to get a handle on and i agree that sometimes it can seem arbitrary. the idea is to work it so it presents what you want to say, in the best possible way.
some good images AA though i wonder if a comma is needed after great, on the 1st line. while it reads well as prose, i think it would read better in the form or a poem, though i do think if done that way a lot of the smaller words could be foresaken.
it has a godly feeling about it. i enjoyed the rainbow image. (jmo)
thanks for the read.