09-27-2011, 05:59 AM
I am not usually a fan of rhyming couplets, especially when they are twisted to get the end rhyme, but you have a very distinctive voice, John, and you make this work with the unique twist of wryness that you always add to your poems.
That said, it is such a catchy piece, and a cautionary tale to boot, that I can imagine reciting it to my G-Ks.
Next level, I can also read it as a serious , or at least sobering piece, a metaphor for that 'silence after the viaticum'.
Clever poet.
That said, it is such a catchy piece, and a cautionary tale to boot, that I can imagine reciting it to my G-Ks.
Next level, I can also read it as a serious , or at least sobering piece, a metaphor for that 'silence after the viaticum'.
Clever poet.