hi
it reminds me of a section in the tv series game of thrones.
feels very feudal. drives doesn't feel needed for me on the first line but other than that i like it. it's arthur and the templers and the romans, it's full of testosterone and sadness (doesn't happen often
) i like it a lot.
it's been talked about already (grammar) and of course the poet writes as he/she will. personally if you use periods in the middle of a poem it makes sense to use a cap on the next word. (just a suggestions )
thanks for the read mark
it reminds me of a section in the tv series game of thrones.
feels very feudal. drives doesn't feel needed for me on the first line but other than that i like it. it's arthur and the templers and the romans, it's full of testosterone and sadness (doesn't happen often
) i like it a lot.it's been talked about already (grammar) and of course the poet writes as he/she will. personally if you use periods in the middle of a poem it makes sense to use a cap on the next word. (just a suggestions )
thanks for the read mark