09-28-2011, 11:35 AM
Billy,
What you're saying makes sense. Before coming here, I always capatalized all the first lines, but I quickly noticed no one here was doing that and I liked the way it looked, so I stopped as well. When the question arose as to whether or not to capatalize after the full stop in this poem, I just didn't. I'll take a serious look at it.
In L1, 'drives' wasn't originally there. After I was happy with the poem, I looked at in in reference to Todd's post: 'The Line.' He was talking about each line being able to stand alone and I felt like nothing was happening in the first line to garner enough interest so I reworded so that I could have a little action in the first line. The title is kind of an 'old hat' expression so I wanted the first line to be a good one. That being said, it might be an unecessary addition and I will give it some thought.
Thanks for taking a look at this and offering your opinions, sir.
What you're saying makes sense. Before coming here, I always capatalized all the first lines, but I quickly noticed no one here was doing that and I liked the way it looked, so I stopped as well. When the question arose as to whether or not to capatalize after the full stop in this poem, I just didn't. I'll take a serious look at it.
In L1, 'drives' wasn't originally there. After I was happy with the poem, I looked at in in reference to Todd's post: 'The Line.' He was talking about each line being able to stand alone and I felt like nothing was happening in the first line to garner enough interest so I reworded so that I could have a little action in the first line. The title is kind of an 'old hat' expression so I wanted the first line to be a good one. That being said, it might be an unecessary addition and I will give it some thought.
Thanks for taking a look at this and offering your opinions, sir.