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The Big November
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10-12-2011, 06:00 AM
Like Leanne, the many commas give me pause. Your content is quite fulfilling, it makes one stop and ponder. I would personally drop 'the sky' down a line. "A walking hymn" is beautiful.
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
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The Big November - by only rob - 10-12-2011, 01:46 AM
RE: The Big November - by Aish - 10-12-2011, 04:16 AM
RE: The Big November - by Leanne - 10-12-2011, 04:22 AM
RE: The Big November - by only rob - 10-12-2011, 10:35 PM
RE: The Big November - by Ca ne fait rien - 10-12-2011, 04:26 AM
RE: The Big November - by Aish - 10-12-2011, 06:00 AM
RE: The Big November - by Leanne - 10-13-2011, 04:46 AM
RE: The Big November - by addy - 10-13-2011, 03:55 PM
RE: The Big November - by only rob - 10-13-2011, 10:47 PM
RE: The Big November - by Wildcard - 10-14-2011, 03:17 AM
RE: The Big November - by Todd - 10-14-2011, 07:21 AM
RE: The Big November - by only rob - 10-15-2011, 11:28 PM
RE: The Big November - by billy - 10-16-2011, 02:23 PM
RE: The Big November - by Bronte - 03-17-2012, 09:21 PM
RE: The Big November - by ChristopherSea - 09-17-2013, 02:44 AM
RE: The Big November - by milo - 09-17-2013, 02:48 AM
RE: The Big November - by ChristopherSea - 09-17-2013, 03:13 AM
RE: The Big November - by tectak - 09-17-2013, 04:43 AM
RE: The Big November - by bena - 09-17-2013, 10:16 AM
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