10-13-2011, 03:55 PM
Just wanted to chime in and say this is a stunning piece. It's like a piece of fine cinema, how you captured a moment in time through such vivid, haunting impressions. I'll second Leanne's suggestion that "the woman" seems a naked line on its own so you might need to pull up the stuff after, but other than that damn. 
Mighty fine work.
Mighty fine work.
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?