11-11-2011, 11:21 PM
I agree re: 'cessation'
I think back then I was trying to be too clever, and chose a word which wasn't naturally in my vocabulary...and it did irk me. A simple word is much more effective...I accept your suggestion.
I will argue to keep 'Humanity' as it has the double meaning of 'mankind' and 'compassion'.- Something as bestial as the First World War came close to destroying 'compassion' it didn't almost destroy 'mankind'.
Thank you for your kind words about the remainder of the poem.
I think back then I was trying to be too clever, and chose a word which wasn't naturally in my vocabulary...and it did irk me. A simple word is much more effective...I accept your suggestion.
I will argue to keep 'Humanity' as it has the double meaning of 'mankind' and 'compassion'.- Something as bestial as the First World War came close to destroying 'compassion' it didn't almost destroy 'mankind'.
Thank you for your kind words about the remainder of the poem.