11-26-2011, 02:37 PM
jill, I suggest you post your piece in another thread pronto, in case people miss it in the comments section. What a shame that'll be!
I like your piece, mark. At first blush it's cynical, but its actually more bittersweet and sad... judging by the title and the narrator's earnestness there is a desire to actually remember these women who struck him and that he's savored in some way, and there's a minor tragedy in that they do mean something to him but in the end they also escape him, like fleeting ghosts.
I like your piece, mark. At first blush it's cynical, but its actually more bittersweet and sad... judging by the title and the narrator's earnestness there is a desire to actually remember these women who struck him and that he's savored in some way, and there's a minor tragedy in that they do mean something to him but in the end they also escape him, like fleeting ghosts.
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?