11-26-2011, 10:37 PM
I'm just wondering.. is this poem about nostalgia, or is it about dementia?
In line 5 of the first stanza, there's a comma between "bright" and "flashes". Isn't that comma a little bit out of place there?
At first I thought the second stanza was a bit short and I felt like the poem wasn't really finished yet, but after reading it a few times, I think it's fine as it is.^_^
I don't really have anything else to say, except that I liked the poem, especially the descriptions.^_^
Thank you for the read
In line 5 of the first stanza, there's a comma between "bright" and "flashes". Isn't that comma a little bit out of place there?
At first I thought the second stanza was a bit short and I felt like the poem wasn't really finished yet, but after reading it a few times, I think it's fine as it is.^_^
I don't really have anything else to say, except that I liked the poem, especially the descriptions.^_^
Thank you for the read