Playing with a new toy

[grannyjill]

Jill, it only needs two layers to be poetic really -- and you have a metaphorical layer as well as the literal, so it's just dandy

I don't consider the last lines 'telly' at all, I view them as a summary and think they do their job quite well.

Crikey - that has come as a surprise! Thank you, perhaps it isn't as bad as I thought it was,