lets remember guys (phil 
) this is the novice forum. (no big line by's)/admin
for me the poem feels a bit weak while i like some of it L1, 2, 5,6,7, and 8, the rest feels too of a oneness.
i'm not sure how to say it. apart from it tells me nothing new. that the lines 1 and 2 haven't told me. it feels a bit generic.
i have no suggestions other than ask could it be made into something sold with a new way of telling us. thanks for the read as always.
) this is the novice forum. (no big line by's)/adminfor me the poem feels a bit weak while i like some of it L1, 2, 5,6,7, and 8, the rest feels too of a oneness.
i'm not sure how to say it. apart from it tells me nothing new. that the lines 1 and 2 haven't told me. it feels a bit generic.
i have no suggestions other than ask could it be made into something sold with a new way of telling us. thanks for the read as always.