For Love (double etheree)
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(12-10-2011, 08:01 AM)rayheinrich Wrote:  
So here's a question: How much does changing the lay-out to
something like the below change the meaning?

                      Lawns   
                     Flowers
                   Filled   hours
              with  snatched   moments
             Beneath     spreading   oaks
          an   old   cob-webbed   shed   rests
        its    head    on    a    listing   fence
      home  to   bent  forks   and   rusting  spades
    musty  sacks,  smashed  flower  pots   and  string
  Longing  for  bright  sun  and  sweet  smell  of  spring
    Old  Joe  sits   clutching   his  mug   of  hot  tea
      with  knotted  hands,  twisted  like   briars
        evidence    of    long    hours    spent
          tending   shrubberies   and   paths
            ancient    hedges   and   lawns
               Back-breaking    labour
                  For   his   master
                    and  mistress
                      he’d  die
                        Why?


P.S. Lay-out interests me. It's SO easy to use badly (IHMO).
E. E. Cummings used it bunches. See Higgledy Piggledy if interested
in discussing further.

i think the lay can change some poems, as in enhance, and destroy others by making them look like kitch. here i think it enhances as the first word you see is lawn as well as the  sp we have the [ind] ind
granny ; if you look at the post tags on the top of the forum, it shows you how to use the space tags.
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Messages In This Thread
For Love (double etheree) - by grannyjill - 11-27-2011, 05:07 PM
RE: For Love (double etheree) - by Philatone - 11-30-2011, 11:57 AM
RE: For Love (double etheree) - by grannyjill - 12-01-2011, 04:45 PM
RE: For Love (double etheree) - by Leanne - 12-02-2011, 04:45 AM
RE: For Love (double etheree) - by Wildcard - 12-02-2011, 04:58 AM
RE: For Love (double etheree) - by grannyjill - 12-02-2011, 08:27 PM
RE: For Love (double etheree) - by billy - 12-07-2011, 08:55 PM
RE: For Love (double etheree) - by grannyjill - 12-08-2011, 07:42 AM
RE: For Love (double etheree) - by billy - 12-08-2011, 10:47 PM
RE: For Love (double etheree) - by grannyjill - 12-10-2011, 05:13 AM
RE: For Love (double etheree) - by rayheinrich - 12-10-2011, 08:01 AM
RE: For Love (double etheree) - by billy - 12-11-2011, 08:44 PM
RE: For Love (double etheree) - by Leanne - 12-11-2011, 11:28 AM
RE: For Love (double etheree) - by grannyjill - 12-11-2011, 05:19 PM
RE: For Love (double etheree) - by billy - 12-11-2011, 08:39 PM



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