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i wasn't hurt that you didn't mention my name

i said i like the 1st vesre of the edit and the 2nd verse of the original...but i don't count...i see that now ...

just kidding of course. todd's advise is good about giving an edit time to settle before you do another one.

Aww Billy you know I love ya :d

I actually agree with you about it the parts. The second part seems a little less potent than before. Shelved for now but I'll get back to it.

I will openly declare that I prefer the original version - I've just re-read my immediate reaction to it - and except for the leg-pulling I will stick with that.

I know how you feel about de-constructing and reconstructing a poem. It is how I felt after doing a rewrite to try and incorporate all the helpful suggestions I had received for my poem The Storm...I ended up not liking it very much. It is now put away (as Todd suggests to you) for me to read at some time in the future.

I think that your opinion is what confirmed to me that I was getting off track. I already felt that something was lost and you affirmed my belief. Thanks for your honest opinion.