From young to old

[Erthona]

What follows after the line break is probably more feedback than you wanted. If you don't want that much just read what's above the line

Overall a nice description of the process of life, and the irony therein.

Could use some tightening here and there.
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This is a nice description "from smooth to rough"

Tense problem here

"in the beginning
we can't stop laughing
but at the end
we laugh while we cry"

"in the beginning
we couldn't stop laughing
but at the end
we laughed while we cry

and if you could bare some punctuation

ripples:
numbers we can't count
& wrinkles:
climbing over our skin

"and they say
that we have to fail
to start again
let's begin with failing
so we can come again
to where we came from"

maybe (although your intent is not entirely clear to me)

"they say
that we must fail
in order to start again
(then?) let us begin with failing
so we may come again
from where we first came"

Purely personal of course, as it is more a matter of style, but I think ending with the rhyme makes it stronger.

"pour the young blood
over our everlasting pain
recreate from the ashes
a new-birth again"


Overall a nice description of the process of life, and the irony therein.

Dale