Half a goodbye

[billy]

v. 2
"tend to" and "though" added to S.6

Half a goodbye

carried you down the jet way, for some reason i;m thinking 'sci fi' with jet way, though i'm thinking it's the departure terminal
the other half tangled
with the keys in my pocket. i quite like the division of the goodbye

The handshake had ended. The revolving door
folded you into the lobby.
The attendant shipped your bag North, i think this line could be improved

the same bag you emptied
from my trunk like a bullet
from a barrel. Now that you are cliche, and the enjambment falls down a little for me

gone, there is nothing again the enjambs make me stall
to pile on the backseat, the same back-seat or back seat
seat you emptied i do like the words of this stanza, i just think it could be en-jambed much better.

when the terminal walked up feels a bit ambiguous
to your window
and knocked.

I tend to drive alone with the radio
off, your window cracked
and tuned to the breeze, though

a block from home
I noticed
the stereo was on,

no wind to course through
the ache of a guitar
and no one else to hear.

for me a lot of the problems spring from the enjambment (throughout) i think if you sorted that out most of what i find at fault would be fixed.
at first i felt it was father son then i wasn't sure any more. as it is, i'd concentrate on the line ends and when you think you've got them right, see if you can add a bit more substance, it feels like an easy going piece and i'm not sure if it should or shouldn't, does he care about the person leaving or doesn't he, i think you could make that a definite either way.
i don't think you need to do a great big edit to get it where i think you think it should be. jmo

as always, thanks for the read.