03-20-2012, 05:43 AM
reworked edition is here to be torn down again! i mean that in the most positive way possible 
thanks for the time, billy. in the interest of taking the piece in a new direction, i decided to opt for a rewrite. i did see your take on the enjambment, particularly in the 4th stanza. hopefully, this new version does not suffer as heavily from similar problems (though other factors always emerge).
appreciate your feedback
thanks for the time, billy. in the interest of taking the piece in a new direction, i decided to opt for a rewrite. i did see your take on the enjambment, particularly in the 4th stanza. hopefully, this new version does not suffer as heavily from similar problems (though other factors always emerge).
appreciate your feedback
Written only for you to consider.