06-10-2012, 03:54 PM
Adds a whole new meaning to "I get a kick out of you".
I would assume that "kick" is the kiru, although this reads more like a Senryū as it is absent the seasonal reference, and speaks to human foibles. I do like how you ignore the gratuitous syllable count; by doing so this probably comes closer to the actual phrasing than than those poems that rigidly adhere to such nonsense. "Scramble Eggs" would also make a good title
Dale
I would assume that "kick" is the kiru, although this reads more like a Senryū as it is absent the seasonal reference, and speaks to human foibles. I do like how you ignore the gratuitous syllable count; by doing so this probably comes closer to the actual phrasing than than those poems that rigidly adhere to such nonsense. "Scramble Eggs" would also make a good title
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.