a story of love

[addy]

I agree there's a bit of cliche here when it comes to the imagery. I do like the vibe though. There is something dark and big creeping up on them, but the overall mood is still sweet and the protagonists are wholly focused on one another. I think I'd enjoy a hint of what it might be that's separating them.... you don't need to tell us overtly, but just a tease of what it could be? (is the darkness, for instance, a metaphor for creeping sickness or death over paradise? On the other hand you say "the love fades", implying they've fallen out of love? Maybe I'm overreaching)

The twilight slowly sets
As the love slowly fades
A love we both fought for
Where impending loss was known
Our hands hold each other in their embrace why not just "our hands embrace"?
As we watch the sun set
Shadows climb the hills we stand on
Watching the hill synonym for hill slip beneath a sea of darkness
Shadows lap at our feet
As I take a last look into your eyes
I see sadness in those soft brown, tear stricken eyes
And my heart breaks for the last time
Just before the light before Shouldn't repeat "before" us goes out
And we are plunged into darkness
As yet another chapter closes
On the story of love

thanks guys.

Thanks for the read