Wildflower Mantle

[billy]

This was beautiful, you have a way with words. And you're much better than me at phrasing so can't really comment on that.

i guess the only thing that stood out to me was the line "unseen yet felt" on the third stanza... what was unseen? Was it sorrow? Though the poem mentions that you cry. But anyway that's very very minor.

it's like they're used to the horror. but you know it affects them. a bit like soldiers and killing the first ones the hardest but you never get to like it.
any suggestions? i'll have a good think about and see how i can make it less ambiguous. thanks for the comment.