My First Tonka

[milo]

sitting crosslegged
hunched over yellow sand and steel
a lone bulldozer

I wish there were two
or a front end loader

[Magpie]

Hi Milo,
This is funny and very good.
I did notice the first instance of vowel displacement a few hours back now and straight away my thoughts were of yellow steel and an advert where an elephant stood on a tonka to prove it's toughness.
They still make them.... (tonkas not elephants) I checked..... mines getting delivered next week.
Thanks for this, very funny.

[billy]

great as a short, great as a parody and pretty good as a tanka. i take it back it a really good tanka (i think )

[milo]

great as a short, great as a parody and pretty good as a tanka. i take it back it a really good tanka (i think )

I may have tried to be too clever with the "a lone = alone" as well as the "boys are bulldozers girls are front end loaders". Also, the pun probably ruins it as much as it saves it.

still, thanks for the comments, billy

[billy]

the girl boy intent-thing went over my head but it didn't stop it from being enjoyable.

[milo]

the girl boy intent-thing went over my head but it didn't stop it from being enjoyable.

You will never be able to hear the term "front end loader" innocently again.

[milo]

the girl boy intent-thing went over my head but it didn't stop it from being enjoyable.

You will never be able to hear the term "front end loader" innocently again.

backhoe = girls into anal
dump truck = gay boys that like the bottom.

Should this be in the sewer?

[billy]

i don't think so. (be in the sewer)

it's a good example of originalty

[Leanne]

Well now, that's just rude... and along comes a bobcat...