Ship of Fools

[ChristopherSea]

Dope christened vessel
navigates deeply in vein
on sham adventures

[Douglaspocock]

This can mean so much depending on if there are any typos. I am going to assume that there are no typos here.

I think we are talking about heroin here. Which, cool and all, but as most people do not know the true experience of sham adventures, I would be interested in hearing more about the poem.

Describe sham adventures please. Also, I really like the dual purpose wording of and "Vein/Vain".
Please more.

[ChristopherSea]

Thanks for the visit and sharing your experience. You have gotten the gist and double entendre intended. No, there are no typos. Vessel symbolizes a syringe. Sham means bogus or false.

[Magpie]

Dope christened vessel
navigates deeply in vein
on sham adventures

Excellent short poem. The only thing that threw me was the "Dope" reference, which where I am from always refers to hashish, but seemingly it can refer to any drug but mostly of golden brown variety. Nice wordplay with vein. No crit to offer, it's perfect as it is.
Thanks,
Mark

[ChristopherSea]

Dope christened vessel
navigates deeply in vein
on sham adventures

Excellent short poem. The only thing that threw me was the "Dope" reference, which where I am from always refers to hashish, but seemingly it can refer to any drug but mostly of golden brown variety. Nice wordplay with vein. No crit to offer, it's perfect as it is.
Thanks,
Mark

Thanks Mark for appreciating and commenting on the poem! According to Merriam-Webster, Dope is 'an illegal drug (such as marijuana or herion)' and 'a stupid or annoying person', so I was going for the double entendre as I was with vein/vain. Cheers/Chris

[emerald13]

and Dope could mean the 'dope' who is using ... christened vessel could intimate their first time as in 'christening'.

its clever. the title is a little cliched perhaps. enjoyed this >>> Gina

[billy]

Dope christened vessel
navigates deeply in vein
on sham adventures

for me christened takes something away.
doped vessel would be a suggestion.
i'd also suggest removing [deeply]
i enjoyed the wordplay :J:

[ChristopherSea]

Dope christened vessel
navigates deeply in vein
on sham adventures

for me christened takes something away.
doped vessel would be a suggestion.
i'd also suggest removing [deeply]
i enjoyed the wordplay :J:

Maybe, Billy and Gina. I like both the title and 'christened' in their development of metaphor using a cruiseship's virgin voyage for someone shooting heroine for the first time. However, these lines are also part a greater poem in development, so I will definitely look at them again.