Window Cat

[FayandFire]

Outside crickets chirp-
I listen by the window
where you used to sit.

[ChristopherSea]

It's a moving little piece and I am sorry for your loss! . Someone else may suggest how to make a better Senryu out of it on a technical level, but this short form speaks volumes to me emotionally as a cat lover.

[FayandFire]

Thanks christopherSea, Cat lovers unite!

[Volaticus]

I like this one very much. It went straight to my eyes, having lost two cats myself. I think you captured the sadness and the lack of a loved one's presence very well. Thanks a lot for posting this.

[billy]

i think as a senryu it works well.
when ever you do a haiku or senryu or short poem, one of the things we can do
is try swapping the lines about, take words away and if it works don't put them back

[FayandFire]

Thanks Volaticus I hope your loss wasn't to recent if either way Im sorry to hear about it. I hope it wasn't untimely.

And billy thanks for the advice would you say the first line would be better just read as crickets chirp as opposed to outside crickets chirp since it can be assummed crickets generally chirp outside?