Senryu (September 12, 2013)

[Volaticus]

exceeding
fourtyone
call the doctor

[ellajam]

approaching
sixty ~ laughing
my ass off

[Volaticus]

approaching
sixty ~ laughing
my ass off

I like your take on it, made me smile The poem is about being sick and having high fever though.

[ellajam]

approaching
sixty ~ laughing
my ass off

I like your take on it, made me smile The poem is about being sick and having high fever though.

Sorry I didn't get it, I come from Fahrenheit land. Here we would have said:
exceeding
one hundred
(call the undertaker)

hope you're feeling better.

It's been a while since I posted on an international forum. I love those mix-ups.

[ChristopherSea]

That must be 41 degrees centigrade. 41 x 9/5 + 32 = 105.8 degrees celsius! Thanks brain damage temp Louise, you better go straight to the hospital!

[Volaticus]

Sorry I didn't get it, I come from Fahrenheit land. Here we would have said:
exceeding
one hundred
(call the undertaker)

hope you're feeling better.

It's been a while since I posted on an international forum. I love those mix-ups.

Thanks a lot, I'm starting to feel well again. I like these fun little mix-ups, I had a feeling it would happen, but that's just the beauty of being on an international forum

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That must be 41 degrees centigrade. 41 x 9/5 + 32 = 105.8 degrees celsius! Thanks brain damage temp Louise, you better go straight to the hospital!

Yeah, I might have exaggerated just a little

[billy]

yeah here in the philippines it centigrade and in the uk it's the other one.

nice little poem.

i wonder if the cut would have been strong with "where's the doctor" or something to seperate both clauses a bit more.
sorry for getting here late

[Malu]

exceeding
fourtyone
call the doctor

Haha this is a funny poem, nice to see some humor, don't worry you're not even at the half time!

[Volaticus]

yeah here in the philippines it centigrade and in the uk it's the other one.

nice little poem.

i wonder if the cut would have been strong with "where's the doctor" or something to seperate both clauses a bit more.
sorry for getting here late

Thanks billy, I really like your suggestion for the last line, I think it works a lot better than what I have now. Mind if I use it?

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exceeding
fourtyone
call the doctor

Haha this is a funny poem, nice to see some humor, don't worry you're not even at the half time!

Thanks for the feedback, I appreciate it. It's nice to see some different interpretations (the poem is about having a fever, not about age ).

[Volaticus]

Haha, That was funny. Enjoyed.

Thanks

[bena]

ummm I don't really know if it's acceptable to add your own takes on someone else's thread but I'm gonna try anyway and see if I get lashes:

fever spikes
when hair used
damn I'm old

[billy]

normally it's just done a new thread unless the poet says free for all or something like it. but i'm sure you won't get hung for it

[Volaticus]

I don't really know either, but you won't hear me complain

[Malu]

yeah here in the philippines it centigrade and in the uk it's the other one.

nice little poem.

i wonder if the cut would have been strong with "where's the doctor" or something to seperate both clauses a bit more.
sorry for getting here late

Thanks billy, I really like your suggestion for the last line, I think it works a lot better than what I have now. Mind if I use it?

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exceeding
fourtyone
call the doctor

Haha this is a funny poem, nice to see some humor, don't worry you're not even at the half time!

Thanks for the feedback, I appreciate it. It's nice to see some different interpretations (the poem is about having a fever, not about age ).

Oh haha ok I can see that too, but I didn't at first since I'm from America and we still use the standard system haha