Spell

[Malu]

Succulent nectar
Deep down in the stalk
Epitome of flavor

[Erthona]

Malu,

"Succulent nectar" seems redundant.
"deep down" ditto.


Of course the real problem I have with this is it seems to have nothing to do with the title. A spell (I am assuming magic spell, as nothing else makes sense) generally list ingredients or actions that achieve a result, I don't really see that here. I went and checked the definition of "spell" and there were no definition of which I was unaware.
Also, as nectar is generally just sugar water, I don't really see a connection between that an "Epitome of flavor". Maybe "Epitome of sweetness".

Sorry, but this just seems as though you threw these words together without much thought for what they actually meant. I'd be happy to be wrong, but that's the way it seems at the moment.

Dale

[Malu]

Malu,

"Succulent nectar" seems redundant.
"deep down" ditto.


Of course the real problem I have with this is it seems to have nothing to do with the title. A spell (I am assuming magic spell, as nothing else makes sense) generally list ingredients or actions that achieve a result, I don't really see that here. I went and checked the definition of "spell" and there were no definition of which I was unaware.
Also, as nectar is generally just sugar water, I don't really see a connection between that an "Epitome of flavor". Maybe "Epitome of sweetness".

Sorry, but this just seems as though you threw these words together without much thought for what they actually meant. I'd be happy to be wrong, but that's the way it seems at the moment.

Dale

I was using the third definition of spell, meaning a short period, a period spent in an activity, a period of a specific kind of weather. Hope that makes sense now. Nectar is a sugary fluid, but its especially secreted by plants, within flowers, not just the fluid, think about the context of the flower. And you know with flowers, blossoming and what not happens with seasons, so that makes it tie more into my title better. Since the third definition of spell is like I said, a period of specific kind of weather, which can be a season. Also if it has to be sugary, that means it is sweet. And succulent means tender, juicy and tasty, so it is not that redundant. And I just used deep down to further emphasis that part. I also used epitome of flavor because epitome means a person or thing that is perfect in that quality, so in this case a thing. And flavor means a distinctive taste, so by this thing being perfection of a distinctive taste, think about what that alludes to. Hope this clarifies things, and thanks for commenting!

[Erthona]

I stand corrected, although I am not sure I buy your rationale, I do respect that you have one, and that is good enough for me. That is to say, I no longer think you were just throwing words together without thought, as you have shown you did think about what you were saying, and that is all anyone could ask.

Dale

[Malu]

I stand corrected, although I am not sure I buy your rationale, I do respect that you have one, and that is good enough for me. That is to say, I no longer think you were just throwing words together without thought, as you have shown you did think about what you were saying, and that is all anyone could ask.

Dale

Thanks!