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There was a senorita who ate 
chips and Velveeta who’s sweeta
and happy she did eat her! 
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		 (03-19-2014, 12:26 PM)Erthona Wrote:  .
There was a senorita who ate 
chips and Velveeta who’s sweeta
and happy she did eat her! 
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Definition of SENRYU
:  a 3-line unrhymed Japanese poem structurally similar to haiku but treating human nature usually in an ironic or satiric vein 
http://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/senryu
Paco says sharp cheddar
is better 
with Luchetta’s sweet taco 
	 
	
	
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		 (03-19-2014, 06:30 PM)ChristopherSea Wrote:   (03-19-2014, 12:26 PM)Erthona Wrote:  .
There was a senorita who ate 
chips and Velveeta who’s sweeta
and happy she did eat her! 
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Definition of SENRYU
:  a 3-line unrhymed Japanese poem structurally similar to haiku but treating human nature usually in an ironic or satiric vein 
http://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/senryu
Paco says sharp cheddar
is better 
with Luchetta’s sweet taco 
Oh Lord has it come to this
that we must strive to fail; to rhyme
is not a sin like gluttony.


 
	 
	
	
	
		
	
 
 
	
	
	
		
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		 (03-19-2014, 06:56 PM)tectak Wrote:   (03-19-2014, 06:30 PM)ChristopherSea Wrote:   (03-19-2014, 12:26 PM)Erthona Wrote:  .
There was a senorita who ate 
chips and Velveeta who’s sweeta
and happy she did eat her! 
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Definition of SENRYU
:  a 3-line unrhymed Japanese poem structurally similar to haiku but treating human nature usually in an ironic or satiric vein 
http://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/senryu
Anything to keep the Haiku/Senyru definition controversy going, right? OK Dale, it that is legit, than is this?:
Paco says sharp cheddar
is better 
with Luchetta’s sweet taco 
Oh Lord has it come to this
that we must strive to fail; to rhyme
is not a sin like gluttony.



Gluttony is apropos, as this is most rhymes that I have ever packed into a tiny poem. Burp...
	 
	
	
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		Chris,
Anything to keep the Haiku/Senyru definition controversy going, right? OK Dale, it that is legit, than is this?
Of course, anything goes. This is an online magazine,so to speak,and since someone did it here it must make it a Senryū, right? Ipsp facto, so is yours. Ever read "Gulliver's Travels"? The only problem is that yours rhymes. chedder-better. It would be better if you wrote
    Paco says sharp cheddar
    is better with
    Luchetta’s sweet taco 
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"to rhyme
is not a sin like gluttony."
That depends on what the definition of "is" is. 
Thanks for playing,
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		i tried to join in but my brain won't get out of neutral, still enjoyed the thread though 
 
	
		
	
 
 
	
	
	
		
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		[quote='Erthona' pid='157987' dateline='1395248304']
Chris,
Anything to keep the Haiku/Senyru definition controversy going, right? OK Dale, it that is legit, than is this?
Of course, anything goes. This is an online magazine,so to speak,and since someone did it here it must make it a Senryū, right? Ipsp facto, so is yours. Ever read "Gulliver's Travels"? The only problem is that yours rhymes. chedder-better. It would be better if you wrote
    Paco says sharp cheddar
    is better with
    Luchetta’s sweet taco 
Yes, it is better with the simple edit!
	
	
	
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