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Her delicate accent and suave foreign tongue
cascade as I blush, look away, and then hum.
Her message unanswered, she sends it anew,
this time to a drunkard whose balls won’t end blue.
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haha I loved it. I like the contrast between the vocab in the beginning and the end, that kind of snaps you out of reverie. My only suggestion would be to change 'who's' to 'whose'.
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(05-02-2014, 05:59 AM)expiring_touch Wrote: haha I loved it. I like the contrast between the vocab in the beginning and the end, that kind of snaps you out of reverie. My only suggestion would be to change 'who's' to 'whose'.
Thanks for the read, I'm glad you liked it; and good catch there.
