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high tide - bearded mussels flex
*a monoku is a one-line poem variation of the haiku which contains seventeen syllables or less. it includes a caesura (a pause) dictated by a sense or speech rhythm with little or no punctuation. the first word in the line is not capitalized.
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08-15-2014, 05:41 PM
(This post was last modified: 08-15-2014, 05:42 PM by billy.)
so it's a two line haiku?
does it need a seasonal word?
to anyone whose just starting out; these short poems can be used to the juices flowing.
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yes, basically it's a stripped down haiku. this a pretty modern form (1970s i believe, with poets like Marlene Mountain experimenting with haiku and breaking away from more traditional renderings) so the kigo is not as obvious and can be implied or simply removed at the poet's discretion. nature should still be referenced in some way though, as with traditional haiku/senryu.
that is my understanding. others who are more familiar with the form could shed more light on the subject.
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(08-16-2014, 02:37 AM)entwife Wrote: cute little play on words.
(08-15-2014, 01:22 PM)cjchaffin Wrote: the first word in the line is not capitalized and is in lower case.
isn't this redundant?
oh jeez. thanks for catching that, i'll edit. there's a reason why i shouldn't post things early in the morning
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Sorry, but I snorted coffee through my nose when I read your monoku. "Bearded mussel' being used as a term for female genitalia.
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