haiku

[cjchaffin]

beneath the rowan
a red kite
broken

[maximumjake]

between blue kites

bicycle

25

Vanguarded at the studio today and got promoted. 

Grateful. 

[Tamara]

beneath the rowan
a red kite
broken

great image of the rowan tree and a broken red kite. they tie in nicely.


blood moon
on the rowan tree -
autumn berries

[cjchaffin]

between blue kites

bicycle

25

Vanguarded at the studio today and got promoted. 

Grateful. 

nice!!

[cjchaffin]

beneath the rowan
a red kite
broken

great image of the rowan tree and a broken red kite. they tie in nicely.


blood moon
on the rowan tree -
autumn berries

thanks 

and i like what you have written as well, nice take on the blood moon

[maximumjake]

simultaneously fired at the same time, and got a new gig!

remember to never over share with your boss

even if he is jewish

other people are not fire

[Magpie]

Great image you've painted here. I'm not sure if it was intentional to use a 'red kite' which could be interpreted as either a childs toy or the bird of prey, either way though it still works well and the choice of the rowan with all it's connected myths adds to the scene.
Where I live in the past few months there have been a lot of red kites (the bird of prey) found poisoned which for me makes this haiku all the more relevant and striking.

[cjchaffin]

thanks a.r.

it was intentional. i'm fascinated by the symbolism of the rowan tree. 
i also have a friend in Sweden who is in love with red kites (the bird)
and we were emailing back and forth the other day about the rowan 
and she said she found a poor kite in the woods not too long ago,
under a rowan, suffering from a broken wing. her husband took care of it as humanely as possible.
i guess the image just stuck in my head and i thought the play on words would work here.

thanks for the wonderful comment

[just mercedes]

When I first read this, I saw a child's kite. I think the suggestion to make this a haibun is excellent - or even a tanka, with the final lines showing what happened next, making clear the double meaning of 'kite'.

[cjchaffin]

very nice haiku. have you thought of making it a haibun? it was much richer when I read the story behind it.

i had not thought of making it a haibun. i have only written one and it was years ago. i'm not even all that comfortable writing haiku 
but i do tend to be rather prosaic with my poetry, so a haibun just might be the ticket.

thanks for the great suggestion!

[cjchaffin]

When I first read this, I saw a child's kite. I think the suggestion to make this a haibun is excellent - or even a tanka, with the final lines showing what happened next, making clear the double meaning of 'kite'.

thanks mercedes, i thought that was a great suggestion as well. i like a little mystery but a tanka or haibun would definitely flesh out the story a bit more. food for thought! thanks!