glacier

[srijantje]

on the glacier
a butterfly
snowflakes falling

[ellajam]

Hi, I like this. At first I thought the mix of seasons, fall into winter, but the glacier. I really don't know glacial weather well, it puts an enjoyable twist and question into it for me.

It's a beautiful image.

[billy]

you dark horse.
i wouldn't change anything. it reads a a clear cut image, i have no idea if butterflies frequent glaciers but it doesn't matter. loved it.

on the glacier
a butterfly
snowflakes falling

[cidermaid]

I saw a documentary once that this one brought to mind, of brown bears with cubs going up the mountain slopes to eat the moth / buterflies that live under the scree. I know a slate scree is not a glacier, but the show made for a strong image that stuck - and the snow started falling as the bears ate them. But way off topic.
Back to your poem
I don't know if buterfly is normally classed as a summer season word, but I like the way the two other lines sit in direct contrast as winter images / words. Also the glacier brings up thoughts of solid / immovable / harsh and the buterfly and the snow are soft and fleeting - except when they are both trapped on/ into a glacier and then they too become part of the frozen display.
think this one works as a mind feast on multiple levels.
I am not 100% with the snowflakes falling - but do not have any alternatives to suggest so I guess the final comment is no crit.
Nice one. AJ.

[srijantje]

thanks for the comments everybody

just a week ago I found myself on a glacier saw a butterfly and then snowflakes falling......also this glacier was moving in its own harsh way,rocks falling off,water running underneath etc.
thanks again,it came to me in a flash

[just mercedes]

Yay! The Glacier Butterflies are not extinct! Even though the earth moves below them, they're creatures of the air.

I wish I could say

"Just a week ago
I found myself"

such a blend of Siddhartha and what's-is-name who went looking for his friend ...

[srijantje]

but.....can it be classified as a haiku I wonder?

[maximumjake]

snow flakes

melt glass

into mud

[srijantje]

between a fuck
and a hard place
everlasting peace

[billy]

but.....can it be classified as  a haiku I wonder?

i'd say yes, it has all the components.

[donbouquet]

a good haiku imho.
two nice images, a snowy glacier and a butterfly juxtaposed.

[srijantje]

thanks Don

[Bunx]

Remind me of time when I worked at a ski hill. When half the mountain is covered with snow and the bottom half is not. The blending of the season is an awesome theme in the this poem.

[azure]

on the glacier
a butterfly
snowflakes falling

This piece actually calmed me down. It had a zen like quality to it that I appreciated. Also kudos for the excellent imagery. It's brevity is concise and it captures a powerful scene with photographic like precision.

[srijantje]

utmost praise

[azure]

utmost praise

utter ass licker

[srijantje]

ah well....it's not the sewer,you know

[azure]

ah well....it's not the sewer,you know

sewer everywhere.

[dwestmor]

I like this as well. It leaves me questioning if there is a literal butterfly or if the flakes fall with the grace of one. Works for me.

[Erthona]

SJJ,

"but.....can it be classified as a haiku I wonder?"

Who cares, a good poem supersedes categories. Such distinction are for CPA's and academicians who have no soul, nor the fainest idea of what it is to create. You know, total spineless twits! Don't worry, this poem is good enough that it doesn't need such classifications. Classifications are what give lessor poems validity and weight, when a poem is good it needs no artificial support.

Dale