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Her sunglasses made her look like she was trying to be cool,
though it was the middle of summer.
She never seemed to smile in pictures,
but then again she hated cheese.
Her make-up made her look pretty
ugly (less than usual).
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(12-22-2014, 05:49 PM)Wjames Wrote: Her sunglasses made her look like she was trying to be cool,
though it was the middle of summer.
She never seemed to smile in pictures,
but then again she hated cheese.
Her make-up made her look pretty
ugly (less than usual).
You have an enjambment and a pun in there and something that seems like anger
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It's quite funny, but isn't it normal to wear sunglasses during summer (or maybe you're trying to contrast cool and hot)?
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this is cute, and I can see how it plays out quite nicely. I think it's creative, and unlike most work on here.