writing

[dwestmor]

I pour out my soul
they don't get it but I do
and that's all that counts

[ellajam]

Hi, dw, I think you could lose the and. The first line might be more effective if it was an image of how you pour your soul out instead of just telling me you do.

Have a wonderful new year.
ella

[milo]

I pour out my soul
they don't get it but I do
and that's all that counts

I think "pour out my soul" is cliché

[Erthona]

DW,

I agree with milo, it is a cliche.

What I am having trouble with is what is the reason anyone needs to know this?
You pour out your soul. Besides being a cliche, it doesn't really say much. What does that mean.
What does it mean that "they" don't "get it"? They don't get that you are pouring out your soul?
And if all that counts is you getting it, why bring this up at all. You already knew this, and they, everybody else
do not matter. So who are you speaking to?

Please feel free to ignore everything I've said.

Dale

[Leah S.]

Cliche's are okay if you don't take them seriously. You could replace the whole last line with a snide comment like "poor sods" or "idiots" and it would change the tone from the faint complaint I thought I detected. Leah