Hair Ice (for Tom)

[Erthona]

Hair Ice (for Tom)
 
I never knew until today
that my stark white hair
is hair ice and my head
a simple granite rock.
 
My hair is melting away
and soon all that will be left
is this shinning rock hard dome;
resting upon weak and worthless shoulders.
 
This explains why my mother
always called me “Hardheaded.”
Certainly a rock is most stubborn;
refusing to help in anyway.
 
It’s me to a “T.”
Care to join me for a cup
of dementia?
Hah—snort, snicker, drool!
 
–Erthona


 
 
©2015

[Lyrical Mirical]

quality ending mate i love it! great that you didn't rhyme at all in a poem about losing mental ability, very clever.

[Erthona]

Thanks Norman and LM for your kind comments. I appreciate the time you took to read an comment. However, I want to let both of you know that critiques only in the critical forums, Novice, Mild, and Serious, are the only ones that will go towards your necessary critiques.

Dale

[tectak]

Hair Ice (for Tom)
 
I never knew until today
that my stark white hair
is hair ice and my head
a simple granite rock.
 
My hair is melting away
and soon all that will be left
is this shinning rock hard dome;
resting upon weak and worthless shoulders.
 
This explains why my mother
always called me “Hardheaded.”
Certainly a rock is most stubborn;
refusing to help in anyway.
 
It’s me to a “T.”
Care to join me for a cup
of dementia?
Hah—snort, snicker, drool!
 
–Erthona


 
 
©2015

Hey,great poem dale,
what inspiration!
(Oh hirsute one...you should know that ice flowers grow on rock. Ice hair needs an organic (usually wood) substrate and most probably the presence of the fungus Tremella mesenterica to provide structural carbon. Still, this does not preclude your head)
Best and impressed,
tectak
I found this rare phenomena in abundance in the copse north of the ornamental lake at Mellerstain Manor, Scotland. You are never too old for surprises.

[billy]

to echo dale's reply. just a one or two liner (which can be funny or not )

will suffice.

example:

resting upon weak and worthless shoulders.
i liked the fact you have no neck

[Erthona]

Thanks Tom,

The pictures I saw looked like rock to me. Oh well, my mother also used to say I had a wooden head and sometimes a pumpkin head However, it is true that I saw the pictures and wrote the poem. That took less time than it did to get the picture on the page.

Billy,

Of course I had no neck, the weight had already pushed my neck down into my body. By the time this occurred I had already lost a total of 9 inches in height due to spinal compression plus loss of neck, making me about 4' 10". Which isn't so bad as I can walk between a super model's legs and if you look up...well, super models don't wear underwear. Now if only I could find a super model who would let me walk between
her legs   

Dale

[ChristopherSea]

Dale, You could probably change that noggin to a hardwood stump to retain scientific accuracy as well as keep your metaphor.

You know, it is also called 'frost beard'. I can envision the sequel!

[Erthona]

For Crisp toe fur...Beard Ice!

I've got a frost beard
did you hear
I keep growing it
down to here
where?
where I grabs me self
fool.
wanna have a go
ata grow
wing Beard Ice?


dale

[ChristopherSea]

For Crisp toe fur...Beard Ice!

I've got a frost beard
did you hear
I keep growing it
down to here
where?
where I grabs me self
fool.
wanna have a go
ata grow
wing Beard Ice?


dale

Nice, but I shall
wing clear
of that beard ice
and the nestled
wood lice
I fear.