Experimenting

[Leanne]

I'm not interested  
in analogy; I'm just
a little haikurious

[billy]

in many haiku and senryu, humour elevates the mediocre.
i found this elevated

[shemthepenman]

fuck me, Leanne, you have exploded recently.

ps. take this as an 'i like it' to everything you post (to which I will subsequently think that but obviously won't comment).

pps. Oh dear, starting a sentence 'fuck me, Leanne' not so good. But hopefully they have this expression in Oz.

[Leanne]

They do, but it very much depends on the context

[Magpie]

Excellent, I like it.

And not that I want to change it at all, but I couldn't help noticing that with a bit tinkering you could make the last two lines have 6 syllables each to go with the 6 syllables in the 1st line.

I just like the idea of one of those misguided haiku 'purist' counter of syllables counting them out and then exploding at the realisation of 666.

It would make me so happy.

Thanks for the read,

Mark

[Leanne]

Love the idea, Mark -- purists exploding is a fantasy of mine also.

I'm going to leave it alone though, because any count that's not 5-7-5 freaks out the misinformed urban haiku-ers.