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[71degrees]

How, at night,
instead of sleeping,
we should spoon
feed heat
to our mouths

[Deadrise]

Hello 71,

How, at night,                               (reads better to me when I drop "How")
instead of sleeping,
we should spoon
feed heat                                      
to our mouths                               (feed each other/others ??????? Lots of interesting possibilities)  
                                             

Take care,
John

[71degrees]

Hello 71,

How, at night,                               (reads better to me when I drop "How")
instead of sleeping,
we should spoon
feed heat                                      
to our mouths                               (feed each other/others ??????? Lots of interesting possibilities)  
                                             

Take care,
John

Thanks for the look, John. My goal would be to subtract words, not add them so first suggestion (yes); second suggestion (no). I like your last thought.