Junku

[Magpie]

Slight Edit (thank you to Bella Ella)
preparing three lines
his first fix of the morning -
5-7-5 slave

Original
preparing three lines
his first fix of the morning -
a slave to haiku

[Tiger the Lion]

preparing three lines
his first fix of the morning -
a slave to haiku

Haha. Love it. I would suggest that 3 lines in the morning is a manageable habit. Avoid longer forms that inevitably lead to rehab!
Paul 

[just mercedes]

Great drugku! I understand the addiction.

[billy]

no need for [a] on the last line or his on the 2nd.

i like the fun or the thing.

[Magpie]

preparing three lines
his first fix of the morning -
a slave to haiku

Haha. Love it. I would suggest that 3 lines in the morning is a manageable habit. Avoid longer forms that inevitably lead to rehab!
Paul 

Yeah, you're right Paul. We must think of those Sonnet fiends who need 14 lines just to get started.

Cheers,

Mark

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Great drugku! I understand the addiction.

Likewise...
Also I think you've come up with a better term with 'Drugku', I obviously wasn't thinking with my 'jun-ku', it sense make don't.
Thanks,

Mark

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no need for [a] on the last line or his on the 2nd.

i like the fun or the thing.

Thanks Billy,
I agree with you about the words that should be dropped and I usually would of but I wanted it to be 5-7-5 to emphasize the attention to detail of the misguided addict, although I appreciate that it is difficult to get that across in the poem. Perhaps if I had put the amount of syllables in each line at the end in brackets???

Thanks for reading,

Mark

[ellajam]

5-7-5 slave. (you can get the haiku from the title)

Ah, I love a haiku in the morning, the need to say something new provokes a closer examination of the landscape, a good start to the day, saying grace in a way. As habits go, one could do worse.

[Magpie]

5-7-5 slave. (you can get the haiku from the title)

Ah, I love a haiku in the morning, the need to say something new provokes a closer examination of the landscape, a good start to the day, saying grace in a way. As habits go, one could do worse.

I completely agree, I'll take it.
I have edited accordingly, thank you kindly.

Mark

when i write haiku
i take off my socks and shoes -
to count syllables

and for this reason
i don't write any tanka -
i can't count that high

[ellajam]

a five seven five
finger-tapping on table —
mate gives evil eye

[rayheinrich]

in the morning
the smell
of haiku

[ellajam]

dawn shuffles words
branch patterned sky
hawk lands

[justlikeyou]

Slight Edit (thank you to Bella Ella)
preparing three lines
his first fix of the morning -
5-7-5 slave

Original
preparing three lines
his first fix of the morning -
a slave to haiku

What about "addicted to haiku" for the last line? Kinda goes with the "first fix" idea?

[rayheinrich]

Slight Edit (thank you to Bella Ella)
preparing three lines
his first fix of the morning -
5-7-5 slave

Original
preparing three lines
his first fix of the morning -
a slave to haiku

What about "addicted to haiku" for the last line? Kinda goes with the "first fix" idea?

    Anyone associating 5-7-5 with haiku shall burn in hell for eternity.
    (Would suggest dropping the "his".)

[ellajam]

Thanks Billy,
I agree with you about the words that should be dropped and I usually would of but I wanted it to be 5-7-5 to emphasize the attention to detail of the misguided addict, although I appreciate that it is difficult to get that across in the poem. Perhaps if I had put the amount of syllables in each line at the end in brackets???

Thanks for reading,

Mark

    Anyone associating 5-7-5 with haiku shall burn in hell for eternity.
    (Would suggest dropping the "his".)

The title works in more than one way. Ignorance is not evil, just like it's not bliss. I should know.

[justlikeyou]

Slight Edit (thank you to Bella Ella)
preparing three lines
his first fix of the morning -
5-7-5 slave

Original
preparing three lines
his first fix of the morning -
a slave to haiku

What about "addicted to haiku" for the last line? Kinda goes with the "first fix" idea?

    Anyone associating 5-7-5 with haiku shall burn in hell for eternity.
    (Would suggest dropping the "his".)

My bad!  Perhaps then  "-haiku addiction"

[rayheinrich]

What about "addicted to haiku" for the last line? Kinda goes with the "first fix" idea?

    Anyone associating 5-7-5 with haiku shall burn in hell for eternity.
    (Would suggest dropping the "his".)

My bad!  Perhaps then  "-haiku addiction"

                frog
                fly -
                just one more

[RiverNotch]

in the party that thinks "his" should be removed. i mean, i get the joke, but i guess it would be a cooler, subtler sort of joke if the addict missed. loled at the slave bit -- feel like that word's the turn, not just the last line. maybe remove dash, too? as in, move it to right before "slave"?