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		 (03-20-2015, 08:33 AM)entwife Wrote:  march madness
mother nature does 
her drip tease
a row of white faces
watch for the sun
I'd thwack that 'the' in the last line. 
(Though bouncing the 'for' instead would lend a certain madness that would be hard to discount.)
	
 
	
	
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		I really like the drip tease. 
 
	
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		I really am digging this, ent.  Drip tease is awesome.  Nice zenning here.
	
	
	
	
		
	
 
 
	
	
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		It's all good, in my opinion. Some elaboration on the white faces would be nice. But, is that not what poetry is about? Beauty, sadness, madness in one's own life, subject to interpretation. Fuck 'em all, it's great!
	
	
	
	
		
	
 
 
	
	
	
		
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		And yes, I forgot to mention (as others have not) that "Drip tease" is major! 
 
	
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