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alas! the snip,
it leaves the leaves;
the head is clipped,
the vine bereaved.
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The snip leaves the leaves? Otherwise, clean, though it kinda sounds funny with the queer rhyme, and I gotta admit, the first thing I got here was "castration!". EDIT: especially with the livestock
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I like it, it makes me think of spring dead-heading, though the vine's relieved, not bereaved. Smile
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(04-25-2015, 03:06 AM)RiverNotch Wrote:  The snip leaves the leaves? Otherwise, clean, though it kinda sounds funny with the queer rhyme, and I gotta admit, the first thing I got here was "castration!". EDIT: especially with the livestock

ha! castration...oh my. that makes ma gentles hurt! 

(04-25-2015, 04:50 AM)ellajam Wrote:  I like it, it makes me think of spring dead-heading, though the vine's relieved, not bereaved. Smile

haha! thanks marcella  Smile
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