04-12-2015, 05:31 AM
alas! the snip,
it leaves the leaves;
the head is clipped,
the vine bereaved.
it leaves the leaves;
the head is clipped,
the vine bereaved.
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04-25-2015, 03:06 AM
The snip leaves the leaves? Otherwise, clean, though it kinda sounds funny with the queer rhyme, and I gotta admit, the first thing I got here was "castration!". EDIT: especially with the livestock
04-25-2015, 04:50 AM
I like it, it makes me think of spring dead-heading, though the vine's relieved, not bereaved.
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04-30-2015, 05:33 AM
(04-25-2015, 03:06 AM)RiverNotch Wrote: The snip leaves the leaves? Otherwise, clean, though it kinda sounds funny with the queer rhyme, and I gotta admit, the first thing I got here was "castration!". EDIT: especially with the livestock ha! castration...oh my. that makes ma gentles hurt! (04-25-2015, 04:50 AM)ellajam Wrote: I like it, it makes me think of spring dead-heading, though the vine's relieved, not bereaved. haha! thanks marcella
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