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Time Flies When You're Having Fun

Time Flies When You're Having Fun
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#1
04-23-2015, 03:43 AM
Yesterday not here
anymore, today will do
until tomorrow
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#2
04-25-2015, 02:58 AM
I like the drag of "Yesterday's" more, and maybe an em dash or something instead of a comma. Otherwise, neat.
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#3
10-06-2015, 08:31 AM
(04-23-2015, 03:43 AM)71degrees Wrote:  Yesterday not here
anymore, today will do
until tomorrow

Forgive my play with your poem but it inspired me.

Yesterday is gone
Now is all there ever is
In the future too.
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