Concession
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The field allows
its lily colored silence
to anyone who can walk
into it with dignity.
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71,  I really like the wisdom herein. ‘allows’ seems a bit off to my ear.
Would something like ‘offers’ convey the proper action?

You could also use ‘lily-colored.’

I might substitute ‘through it’ for ‘into it.’

See what you think. Thanks for sharing this one./Chris
My new watercolor: 'Nightmare After Christmas'/Chris
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