Weathered

[Wjames]

The juniper slouches under snowflakes
and naked trees shiver at the wind’s touch.
 
The frost you hack from the windshield returns
by next morning, and your lips chap over
like broken ice atop a covered lake.

[Achebe]

The line

"and naked trees shiver at the wind’s touch."

is a personification that is out of place in this poem, an abstraction that mars the specificity of the images before and after it.

loved the part where:

The frost you hack from the windshield returns
by next morning

EDIT: I said 'abstraction' when I should have said 'hyperbole'. Trees don't shiver. They can sway, they can swing, and their branches can thrash about, but the tree itself, its trunk in particular, is too heavy to shiver. Twigs can shiver. Thin, poky branch-ends can shiver. Leaves can, but not in this case because the tree is naked. So this one line, which doesn't ring quite as true as the parts before or after, is out of place. Hope that clarifies

[Bunx]

Like this idea alot. The second stanza almost stands alone! Thanks for de read!