"When a light goes out" a short Poem

[Jeremiahcp]

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[ellajam]

Hi, Jeremiah, this is lovely.

First, it would be great if you could give your poems at least a working title. It gets confusing when the list of threads has multiple untitleds,  makes it difficult to find a poem you want to reread. Aside from that titles can be a wonderful tool, you might want to give them some thought.

I found L2 awkward at first but it's growing on me.

[Jeremiahcp]

That makes a lot of sense, Ellajam. From now on, if I don't have a title I can use the 1st line of the poem.

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That 2nd line is troublesome. I need some grammar help: Should that be lost or loss?

[Jeremiahcp]

I am considering the revision on this poem complete for the time being, thank you for the help.