Anorexic Anxiety
#1
In
sanity.
the crushing weight of calm
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#2
I had to think about this one - does it mean that only the insane can benefit from a state of calmness? I don't know the answer but the fact that these few words can get me (and I assume others) thinking must be a good thing IMO.
Or are we given the option to merge the first two "lines" to provide the opposite meaning? Smile
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#3
If not an em dash, then two regular hyphens for that bit of sanity, and the last line shouldn't be capitalized. Not sure what to say about the whole thing -- this feels novel (in its correctness, perhaps), but at the same time generic, and I can't tell which prevails.
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#4
I love the layers in this. Each time I've read it, I feel like I'm uncovering another interpretation. The initial line break is quite clever, great way to add depth without words.
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