fall

[Vanity]

Where did the rolls go?
A thanksgiving mystery
Better find the dog

[Achebe]

The mystery is unravelled too soon, but nice.
Of course, by capitalising the 'R' it could be (unfortunate thread hijack, apologies):

Where did the Rolls go?
A thanksgiving mystery
unless the dog
drove it straight to Calais 
with the aircraft engines.

[Weeded]

Damn Achebe 

[Erthona]

As there is nothing to critique on the poem, it being fairly self contained.
___________________________________

Cheech, "What kind is it man?"

Chong, "Labrador!"


dale

[RiverNotch]

I like that it's a complete evocative picture, but the mystery feels too easily or quickly unraveled, and the picture lacks a certain oomph, either in message, novel thought, or even plain beauty. Oh well.

[justlikeyou]

I agree. A nice image, but one too "telly" (tells too much) as they say. Needs to give the reader something to do/think about/imagine. 

L3 saying something like "have you seen Rocky?" or something that is not a direct reveal of the whodunnit, would give the reader some thinking/imagining room. Was it a toddler? a mad uncle? a cat? a dog? 

Let 'em wonder a bit.

My 2 cents.