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Losing (Senryu)

Losing (Senryu)
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#1
10-04-2016, 12:29 AM
Losing (Senryu)


Woman writhes and sweats
wrestling Nordic-Track machine
set for taller man.

Woman writhes, wrestling
with Nordic-Track machine
set for a taller man.
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10-04-2016, 02:55 AM
This gave me a big grin, nice!
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10-04-2016, 04:54 AM
Smile Nicely done!
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10-04-2016, 05:48 AM
Capital!
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10-09-2016, 05:59 AM
Hello-

If it is a woman writhing, then why is the Nordic set for a taller man?  Perhaps I am missing something, as usual...

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Mark
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10-09-2016, 06:07 AM
(10-09-2016, 05:59 AM)Mark A Becker Wrote:  Hello-

If it is a woman writhing, then why is the Nordic set for a taller man?  Perhaps I am missing something, as usual...

Thanks,
Mark


I guess you can nitpick the phrasing a bit. The idea is that the settings were appropriate for the previous user who was a a man who was taller than this woman. 
I guess it's taller/tall that gives the potential to take it that way.
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