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In the 60s
England
I saw the beetles.
Not the band
fool
the bugs.
Cardinals, Churchyards, Cockchafers.
They were everywhere.
Not the bugs
fool
the fans.
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wriggling all over London.
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(11-29-2016, 08:54 AM)kolemath Wrote: In the 60s
England
I saw the beetles.
Not the band
fool
the bugs.
Cardinals, Churchyards, Cockchafers.
They were everywhere.love the twists up to here
Not the bugs
fool
the fans. fans of what? the Beatles? the beetles? or the general atmosphere of 60s england?
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I like 'fool' and how the subject keeps moving and shifting. Good write, Kole.
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(11-29-2016, 08:54 AM)kolemath Wrote: In the 60s
England
I saw the beetles.
Not the band
fool
the bugs.
Cardinals, Churchyards, Cockchafers.
They were everywhere.
Not the bugs
fool
the fans.
Screen-blind, auto-bots
wriggling all over London.
Ugh, the mispunctuationisms are so ugh ----- but that's my taste. Otherwise, lovely, although the title doesn't feel....entomological enough.
