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The world's longest (k)night
comes once a year in winter.
Haiku or senryu...
The world's longest night
comes once a year in winter,
but not the darkest.
The world's longest knight
comes once a year in Winter;
She's unsatisfied.
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'The Winter Solstice':
nickname for the longest (k)night.
Haiku or senryu?
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(12-11-2016, 11:46 PM)CRNDLSM Wrote: 'The Winter Soltice':
nickname for the longest (k)night.
Haiku or senryu?
No(h).
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12-12-2016, 12:23 AM
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No(h).
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I agree with your honest opinion
my question was about the self reference. writing about haiku could be haiku since it was probably vocal before it was written, making it about communication which is natural?
So the short poem thingy here could not be haiku because of 'the winter solstice' even if the word nickname was altered?
Wait, poetry is only human so... dang
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Right when I'd just watch a (solid, but of course armchair-academic) review of a very meta video game. My one issue with this is I can't be sure whether "the winter
soltice" is intentional, which is the one truly annoying part of an otherwise very interesting experience. BUUUT considering what you do with Knight, then looking at how dukealien reviewed your work, I'd say the annoyance is a part of it? Basically, a work that literally defies criticism -- and though I appreciate that, I cannot in good faith call it lovely (NOT "especially in a critical forum", since this is at least a not-entirely critical section of the forum). I'll just go with interesting. Interesting.
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Sorry duke alien for continuing when I agreed I shouldn't. Sorry everyone else for having asked you critically consider a penis joke...
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(12-12-2016, 09:10 PM)CRNDLSM Wrote: Sorry duke alien for continuing when I agreed I shouldn't. Sorry everyone else for having asked you critically consider a penis joke...
Quite alright, old thing - I took that to be a mere surface phenomenon, a poetic means to an end as it were, rather than the meat of the matter.
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