33 rpm

[Keith]

lake, shinning flat disc
lightning stylus touches record
fishes smell the ozone

[billy]

tasty little senryu Keith

[Keith]

tasty little senryu Keith

I'm glad you cleared that up thanks Billy senryu

[Lizzie]

lake, shinning flat disc -- shining, surely? Aren't disks flat by nature? 'Flat' might be superfluous.
lightning stylus touches record
fishes smell the ozone

Hi Keith! The last two lines are killer. I can smell the ozone.

[Keith]

lake, shinning flat disc -- shining, surely? Aren't disks flat by nature? 'Flat' might be superfluous.
lightning stylus touches record
fishes smell the ozone

Hi Keith! The last two lines are killer. I can smell the ozone.

Thanks Lizzie, I like the end line too and the idea but I didn't do it justice, I have tried to re write this a few times but I've never been able to make it work. Thanks for hooking it out of the pond. Best Keith

[Donald Q.]

I actually really like this idea, shame you have abandoned it...

Here is my tribute.

45 rpm

In the black mountains
storms spark off echoing rocks
A lone goat dances