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		It doesn’t take the brain of Aristotle
to know that drunks are dumb beyond belief.
Your children’s pet is bound to come to grief
if you keep your axolotl in a bottle.
	
	
	
	
		
	
 
 
	
	
	
		
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		I want this to be for fun because of the rhymes.  Dumb beyond belief and bound to come to grief sound hasty.  I just picture a smug drunkard looking at a dead salamander saying, 'that's what happens when you axolotl questions'
	
	
	
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		 (05-26-2017, 10:05 AM)CRNDLSM Wrote:  I want this to be for fun because of the rhymes.  Dumb beyond belief and bound to come to grief sound hasty.  I just picture a smug drunkard looking at a dead salamander saying, 'that's what happens when you axolotl questions'
My friend had her fish in a jar on the floor while she cleaned their tank, and her dog drank a few of them. I could see someone, drunk, grabbing a bottle and swigging it without checking the contents. But yes, you are right, it was fun .
playing with rhymes and sounds.

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		Great title, moving. Aristotle/axolotl and in my mind, alcohol, all works well. Tight, fun to read but brings up a lot of emotion, pets and parents' carelessness. And alcoholic blundering in its tone. A flavor-packed bite, thanks for posting it.
	
	
	
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