Populating II

[dukealien]

Populating II


Pyrrha throws weakly
loth to let her daughter-stones
fall far from her reach.

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(Companion-piece to Populating )

[just mercedes]

The bones of the mother - so Themis instructed. Rocks. I like the way these created females are protected by Pyrra, considered her daughters. Humanizes the legend, for me.

[RiverNotch]

I don't quite like this, not as much as I do the first one. The wordplay behind "seminal", and the whole hilarious fact that the earlier could be read as an ode to masturbation -- this one lacks the wit of the earlier, and the warmth doesn't translate as warmth for me, the contrast between the hot male and the weak female is a little unsavory, and "loth" is a bit of an undue throwback.

[dukealien]

As always, the varied responses and interpretations are stimulating and disconcerting.

This one went through more revisions and still doesn't seem to get the idea across.  After laughing at Deucalion's fathering stereotype/archetype perhaps it's too serious or too uncritical about Pyrrha's mothering?

[nibbed]

I am not big into the mythologies,
but I like where my mind wanders
and I like the tidiness of your poems.
The titles make me think of popish
things.

[Thunderembargo]

Populating II


Pyrrha throws weakly
loth to let her daughter-stones
fall far from her reach.

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(Companion-piece to Populating )

Looking at the mythological link and suggestion that the poem is making helps to measure the vast weight of its implications.  Here, with a few spare lines, you have taken on the responsibility of the poet directly and irrevocably.   I can only but witness what these slender and sagacious lines prophecy and document.